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(Contains: sexual themes)
Your lowered lashes,
A demure challenge, exite
With playful intensity.
As you tease,
With wanton lips,
Promise a moist ascent to ecstacy.

I long to inflame
Your appetites, with a monsoon
Of caresses about your spine,
And for your nipples
To stand, exquisite and proud,
As perfect crowns.

Let me savour your
Feminine flower in the garden
Of delight, as you trace
My contours with your tounge.
Then, in union incandecent
Let us move oblivious to all.

Let our hair flow together
In praise of Venus,
As I stand in honour of you.
Come, let us join,
And return to the Gods
In explosive orgasm.
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I was asked by a woman I once knew to write an erotic poem for her, this is what I wrote, and the results were.... Explosive.
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This is my first authorized critique since joiniing the group.
First of all, the choice of words through the first two stanzas was eye-catching. "I long to inflame your appetite with a monsoon of caresses..." is very unusual expression for modern poetry and even I think of writing such style. Good work for thinking of it first. Second, the line length and rhythm are very well-conceived. You show good awareness of both. I believe I have collected from you before. You promise good reading so far as I remember, and this entry is no exception. I enjoyed it from first line to last.
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BOI-BLUE Apr 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Amazing......
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passionriter Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful emotion and feeling captured in this. Good job!
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SoulDragonWithFlow Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I have never really been a fan of free verse, but this is really quite good. Well described and powerful language. Nice one
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Blyddyn Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the kind words.
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:iconsunkisttar:
Very well expressed. I like this a lot. Sexy. Well done.
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Blyddyn Nov 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you - perhaps you would also like my "Bound play"
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:iconeatingmyownfears:
explosive indeed!
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Blyddyn Sep 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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DragonsChest Sep 16, 2011  Professional Writer
Wonderful poetry...
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