Your lowered lashes,
A demure challenge, exite
With playful intensity.
As you tease,
With wanton lips,
Promise a moist ascent to ecstacy.
I long to inflame
Your appetites, with a monsoon
Of caresses about your spine,
And for your nipples
To stand, exquisite and proud,
As perfect crowns.
Let me savour your
Feminine flower in the garden
Of delight, as you trace
My contours with your tounge.
Then, in union incandecent
Let us move oblivious to all.
Let our hair flow together
In praise of Venus,
As I stand in honour of you.
Come, let us join,
And return to the Gods
In explosive orgasm.
First of all, the choice of words through the first two stanzas was eye-catching. "I long to inflame your appetite with a monsoon of caresses..." is very unusual expression for modern poetry and even I think of writing such style. Good work for thinking of it first. Second, the line length and rhythm are very well-conceived. You show good awareness of both. I believe I have collected from you before. You promise good reading so far as I remember, and this entry is no exception. I enjoyed it from first line to last.
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